Here is my third an final take at an elevator pitch for retractable Eno straps!
Reflection on my feedback
On my last elevator pitch, I received some insightful feedback. Most people liked how the structure of my pitch matched the tone of the product I was selling. They though the "professional causality" of it would translate well the target audience I was trying to reach. I decided to kepp the time lapse in my pitch because I think sets the scene well. I also kept my pitch outside to go along with the outdoorsy theme of Eno products.I did also receive several comments that I should include a voice over on my time lapse of me setting up my Eno to set the scene and explain what was going on.
What I did differently
I took to heart the advice I received and included a voice over on my time lapse. Hopefully this helps fill the quiet space and better set the scene. Furthermore, I took my actual pitch standing up this time as opposed to actually sitting in my Eno to make sure the pitch doesn't come off as too casual.
Hi Holly! Great job on your elevator pitch number three! I love this idea! I think this would be a fantastic opportunity and product to pitch to college students. Living on campus, I see Enos all the time! Personally, I believe that your idea would blow up and truly make our life easier. You told us about our problem and gave a solution! Great job hope to see you create this in the future!
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ReplyDeleteExcellent job on your final elevator pitch! I noticed improvement compared to the last pitch. Your delivery and understanding of your product was still very strong. I liked how you were standing directly in front of the camera for this pitch because it gave you more authority and it showed confidence. Great job again, I think your product would do very well!
Karla
Hi Holly,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your elevator pitch. I like how you included the voice over in the time lapse. The scene matched the product and the content you are trying to sell. Standing up in front of the camera really showed more confidence and seemed more professional.
Holly,
ReplyDeleteGreat job reflecting on those suggestions and putting effort into implementing them into your third elevator pitch. The voice over was a nice touch, definitely better than just laying words over the time lapse. Although standing in front of the camera shows professionalism and presence,I liked the how you were laying down in an eno for the previous one. I thought it was unique and more relatable to your product and customers.
Hi there Holly,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your last elevator pitch, and I am happy to see that you did not change much from the last one. While you did make some great changes I am glad you kept the good parts the same. I feel as though many people fail to see the good in there own work, but I’m glad you were able to.
Hello Holly! I enjoyed watching your final pitch and your updates really made a difference. Having a voiceover during the time lapse was a great idea because you were able to keep my attention throughout and you did not waste time during your video without pitching your product. I also liked that you decided to stand rather than lay in your Eno because it makes you seem more professional and serious about your Eno straps idea. Great job!
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